Feedback from the whole class!

Negatives:

• music was a bit repetitive 
• titles could've been better/too long (could've been over the clips)
• Didn't understand story-line
• too much dialogue
• unclear plot
• Camera work could've been more sturdy 

Positives: 

• good use of sound effects
• use of dreams worked well
• Really good flash back effects
• Good amount of the shots and variety
• Text really good
• effective editing 
• music suits the genre
• good variety of locations
• music built tension
• Meets conventions of thriller - makes the audience ask question 
• good story-line and transitions
• The black and white effects were good

Screen Shots

Screen Shots

Final version of our thriller opening sequence

Plan for our next two lessons

During the next two lessons, we are going to be working on our sound for our opening sequence and then add it to our clip. We are also going to add the missing voice overs, to the clips. 

We will also combine some of the credits, to make it shorter, due to the length being to long for viewers. 

Response to comments.

Overall, we think the comments made were really good, which has boosted our confidence. especially  the fact that people understood when the dreams were,  which we took a long time over making that effect.

However, we mentioned that we knew we needed to add music, but all the groups still mentioned that we needed to do this.

Many of the groups mentioned that our credits at the start were too long, however we cannot add them to our clips due to the white background. however, to overcome the length, we are going to attach some of the credits together, e.g. Directed by, Lauren Day will be on the same page, instead of being separate. 

Rough Cut For Thriller Film

We know that we have to finish the soundtrack.
We know that we have to add the voice overs on phone calls of the person on the other end.

Editing days

Monday 14^th February.

We as a group uploaded all our footage that we filmed onto the Mac computer, into final cut pro. We then watched all of our footage that we filmed and spoke about what clips are good and how we can edit and use them. As well as deleting any unwanted clips that will not be of any use.

Tuesday 15^th February.

We edited some of our footage together in order, using our storyboard to guide us. The first clip that we edited in was the shot of the detective’s equipment on the table, which we cut. We then added in the clip of the detective and Lauren lying in bed, which we did not need to cut, as the clip was fine as it was. We then added the fade in fade out transitions, between the two clips of the equiptment and then the bed. a dream effect was then created by adding a white flash of light, and changing the clip saturation to black and white, which we then used for all of the other dreams/ flashbacks.

Location Recce

This location was the most suitable for our thriller because it was far away from any houses- isolated and had a long drive up to the house, which helped us to create a better atmosphere. the long drive also helped us create a helpless, lonely environment for the character.
However as the location had young children living there, it was harder filming without any background noise.

Test footage

The shots that we think worked well are the panning and close-up shots. However we will try and get a smoother pan. also the point of view shot created a good effect, but we need to make sure the shot doesn't go blurry. 
The long shot of Beth worked really well, however when we are filming the final footage we will add movement into that clip, showing the 'immersed angel' picking flowers, having her back to the camera, then she will swiftly turn around to shock the audience. 

Reflection on childrens film!

The three things we done well for our childrens film were:

1. We were very organised, as we remembered all apropriate props and followed each shot carefully using the right shots angles etc. 
2. We worked well together and had very good team work and split up all tasks evenly. 
3. We created a good film name, which was good for targeting our audience. 

The three things that we did not do so well in our childrens film were: 

1. We did film and create enough shots to fill up the 2 minutes
2. We had to redo a shot, which affected our effect that we were trying to create. 
3. All shots did not create continuity. 

Call sheet

Friday: 

All cast must report to the ping pong tables in long road, at 4:10, where we will travel by bus to Stretham, where we will get a lift to Wicken. 

The scenes that we will be shooting on this day inside Laurens house, therefore we will not encounter whether problems,.

Kelly will be in charge of remembering to bring all props for this day. 

We will be filming in the evening so bring warm clothes, such as a coat. 

Food and drink will be provided by Lauren at her house, which is the location where we will be filming.

All cast is sleeping at Lauren's house so bring sleepover stuff etc. 

We will start filming about 7:00pm until 10:00pm. 

Saturday: 

We will be waking up in Lauren's house, which is the location where we will be filming, so no traveling is needed. 

The scenes that we will be shooting on this day will be located outside.  

Again, food and drink will be provided by Lauren at her house, which is the location where we will be filming. 

We will start filming about 8:00am until 4:00pm 

Kelly will be in charge of taking the props back with her, due to them needing to be disposed of properly. 

If it rains we will use a big umbrella to cover all props etc. 

Script for our thriller 'Immersed Angel'

Detective is asleep in his bed, beginning to show signs of having a dream and his eyes begin to roll. 
Panning shot of detectives belongings in the bedroom, leading to an extreme close up of his face.


Goes into the dream, shows the girl in an orchard holding a bunch of flowers, she is dripping wet, and looks into the camera as if its a pair of eyes. 
Shown by a flash of white light, then dream is in black and white. Establishing shot of the girl in the orchard.


The detectives phone wake him up suddenly.
Extreme close-up of the detectives eyes wide open.


The detective reaches out for his phone, as it is still ringing.
A close-up of his hand picking up the phone.


The other detective is introduced by the two of them having a phone conversation about the crime they have to investigate. Detective 2- ' if you could getup and kindly help me with this situation. get ready now, we have a murder case on our hands.' detective hangs up.
A split screen of both detectives; one fully dressed drinking coffee, the other still in bed.


The first detective gets out of bed and begins to throw his clothes on.
Mid shot of detective


The less experienced detective drives up to the house where he meets his colleague. Detective 2- 'iv'e been informed that the victims a 17 year old girls, and looks like shes been in this state for under 24 hours' Detective 1- ' Okay lets go check it out.'
Establishing shot of the house which cuts to a long shot of the car. An over the shoulder shot is used when the two detectives meet. 


Both detectives walk through the front door and up the stairs to the bathroom.
Point of view shot is used. 


The detectives enter the bathroom where syringes are on the floor and a girl is in the bath.
A panning shot of the bathroom floor which then scans the girl in the bath, starting at her feet, leading to her head. A close-up of the girls face.


Flash back of the detective's dream showing that the girl in his dream is the same girl that has been murdered. 
Long shot of the girl in the orchard, showing flowers on the floor. flash of white light is used to show it's a flash back, then the image is black and white. 


The detective realises this.
Close-up of the detectives face and his reaction. 

Health and safety concerns

When carrying our our shoot, we have to think about the health and safety concerns:

• The props that we are going to use; syringes and a knife; can be dangerous if not handled carefully. 
• When Beth is acting as the Immersed Angel in the bath, each shot will have to be kept short so that Beth will have time to come up for breath in between the shots. This will ensure that she doesn't drown.
• Another thing that we have to be careful about is the floor of the bathroom if it gets wet, so we will have to keep on drying it so no-one slips.  
• Don't put any electricals near water as it can electrocute you. 
• use a torch when outside in the dark so we don't trip over and can see where we need to stand for the particular shot. 
• bring a blanket outside when Beth has to stand outside when she is wet as the Immersed Angel so she doesn't get ill from it. 

Shot lists for our thriller

Whilst Beth and Lauren done the storyboard, Kelly wrote out our shot list. this will help us when it comes to the shooting process as we have included all the information that is needed to make our thriller opening sequence flow.

Storyboard for our thriller

 As part of our planning for our thriller film, Immersed Angel, we drew a storyboard so that all of our shots are shown clearly, which will help the shooting process.

Dates for the camera!

We would like to take the camera out on  the 11th feb, after college. We would also need a tripod and the dolly tracker.

Thank you :)

Amar's presentation

From Amar's presentation the steps we think will be most useful are:

Step 3, which was location Recce. This consists of going to the location before filming and seeing if its a realistic location.  

Another step is step 4, which is the digital storyboard. This is especially important this time, as our storyboard for our childrens was poorly done, as we did not do enough shots and good enough shots. 

The final step is step 1, which is script writing. this is important as we did not use one of these for our childrens film. This affected us when it came to filming our childrens film as we had to think of what to say whilst filming, which wasted a lot of time. Therefore for our thriller, we will have more time to think about other more important stuff such as our shots, which will improve our thriller. 

questions asked

What are you going to do with the music?
We are going to start of with slow mellow music and then it will become more up beat and dramatic.

What kind of thriller is it?
it is a crime thriller, but also an element of a psychological thriller due to the thoughts behind the death.

What house are you going to film at?
This will be located at Lauren's house, inside and outside.

Is it just the detective that sees the ghost, or can everyone else see it as well?
The new and less experienced detective will be the only person who dreams about the angel and sees her.

Part of it is going to be a dream, what effects will you use to show this?
We will use a black and white effect and a white fade sort of thing, so the audience can identify each worlds; dream and normal.

Who's acting in the film?
Beth will be the immersed angel and the two detectives will be Lauren's male friends. 

Research into the Mise-en-scene of our thriller

Typical Props-

• Guns 
• Magnifying glass
• Pen knife 
• developed photos/camera 
• Un-obvious weapons 

 Our props: 

• Syringes - these will be used for our 'un-obvious weapons' - create more suspense for audience
• Bath- in your house where you should be able to feel safe.
• Camera - to take photos of the crime scene.
• Pen knife- this will be our detectives choice of weapon- a gun wont be used as this wont be a realistic prop for us. 

Typical costume:

• Detectives- one will be smartly dressed in dark clothes; the other will be naturally dressed.
• Victim- Their every day clothes
• Antagonist- Will be an everyday natural dress code, as this will make it more difficult for the audience to identify who he/she is. 

Our costume: 

• Detectives will be wearing the typical costume of one smartly dressed and the other naturally dresed.
• The victim will be wearing shorts and a white shirt, which are typical house clothes and the white shirt will reflect her 'Angel' side. 
• We will not be using an Antagonist in our opening sequence. 

Typical lighting (our lighting):

• dull/ artificial lighting in the crime scene
• natural lighting when the detectives are outside the place where the crime took place, creating a contrast.

Typical colour:

• Red- use of blood
• Black- representing death and murders

Our colours:

• Red- use of blood
• Black- representing death and murders
• Green- unusual drug
• Orange- colour of syringes- bring and stand out to be unusual.

Typical set

• Natural environment, e.g the victims house
• Detectives bedroom 
• Outside of the crime scene

Our set

• The bathroom in the victims house
• Detectives bedroom- where his 'dream' will take place
• the drive up to the victims house- showing the isolated house